"I walked to the office and in copper gone to mossy green I saw sea and salt, I saw hard metal changed, brisk in my walk, sharp in my thought like the metal when new and now gone to verdigris" Sometimes the thing that took years to change hits us like a ton of bricks out of nowhere. Another beautiful chapter!
Love as always the attention to detail. Love also when a narrator, depending where they are based, country, town or what have you, can inform the reader that grew up somewhere else.
Like this sentence:
"looked at the copper bays gone to verdigris, mossy green and blue, on the brownstones..."
Such a gift, your descriptions Mary, to both the reader and writer.
Such a grand comment--especially how you inform it with a close read. Also, yesterday a created a Table of Contents for the writing course.: write a project to do that.
Oh, Robert. I can feel his loneliness.
Oh, Holly, thank you so for coming back to the novel. Means so much.
"I walked to the office and in copper gone to mossy green I saw sea and salt, I saw hard metal changed, brisk in my walk, sharp in my thought like the metal when new and now gone to verdigris" Sometimes the thing that took years to change hits us like a ton of bricks out of nowhere. Another beautiful chapter!
Oh, how lovely of you, Susan!
Beautiful. The cadence slows and I could feel the epicenter of Robert’s loss, a stillness, a reconciliation with his own corrosive ways.
As I reread my own work, I do see that this is a moment of a key realization--not sure that tells us about change, but it's a sort of a beginning.
On another note, do see my new table of contents for my course -- with much personal stuff too: https://marytabor.substack.com/p/table-of-contents for Write It!
Oh yeh! I will check it out!
Love as always the attention to detail. Love also when a narrator, depending where they are based, country, town or what have you, can inform the reader that grew up somewhere else.
Like this sentence:
"looked at the copper bays gone to verdigris, mossy green and blue, on the brownstones..."
Such a gift, your descriptions Mary, to both the reader and writer.
Such a grand comment--especially how you inform it with a close read. Also, yesterday a created a Table of Contents for the writing course.: write a project to do that.
Your words and cadence just seem to get better and better. How do you do it? <3
Oh, wow, Tim, made my day with your words.
that she was missing and that I was letting her go missing.
This hit home this morning. ❤️thank you.😢
Means so much that it did, Juli. Grand reader that you are.
Mary, keep writing beautiful words. Sorry I don't always comment but I read and listen to it all. Thank you.
Matthew, that means a lot. You and I know how much comments mean--so much appreciated that you are keeping up as much as you can,
Your site looks interesting!
Hope to hear more! There's a lot here.