This is only my second piece of your novel, I read. I love your dialogues! This one stylistically reminds me Hemingway's style, when on surface everything is so almost light, but under is serious matter.
The 'Remick' joke is so beautifully executed, as is "They heard the pins inside the lock tumble. A familiar sound, merely a click, but they thought, almost as if their minds were one, that they heard the separate mechanisms of the lock moving, tumbling like thunder."
Alisa, a perfect understanding of my intention as I probe Robert's discovery of what happened and of himself. You are such a marvelous reader and I thank you: heart to heart.
Although I don't really do it much myself, I see that a quite a few of the writers I follow are using Notes more and more to promote their posts. And as a reader, when I do go onto Notes, I see posts that from writers I follow that I missed in my inbox. I think if people can read a chapter or a snippet of the glorious writing, they'll be willing to go back to the start and read what's been published. I've done that myself. Sorry not to have any original ideas - marketing isn't one of my strengths!
Marketing is not one of my strengths either. Is posting a note about one oneself okay? I worry that that offends. You are so kind to try to help. Thank you.
It seems to be normal to post notes about one's work, as long as that's not the only thing you post about. At least, that's how it appears to me. Certainly, on the few occasions I've become more active on Notes, I see a bit more traffic on my posts. But I don't have any data on this.
“The absence of trust was a fact of their connection.” This whole chapter reads like a fault line tremor, everything on the brink of seismic disaster, the original cracks having more power than either ever dared to notice. And that last image of Eve turning the keys, the locking mechanism like the sky breaking open. So so so marvelous!
A trust problem emerges. Do we ever trust?
Questioning was my profession, so I love it. Maybe?
I believe we do? Do you? xx
Ah ... Questioning ...
Your imagery is beautiful and striking, like the thunder of the rolling pins in the lock.
Means much that you think so and took the time to comment. So much competition on this site that I'm amazed I ever get read.
Mary, you have such a magnificent way with words!
Oh, you are so kind! I am so grateful!
The intimacy of the dialogue pulled me in. That secret code. Lena inside her head. Wow.
Thank you so. Lena inside his head, yes! as Robert tries to figure out what happened.
The sound of fear. The sound of the inevitable. Those images. Exquisite.
💕💕 to you, Holly.
This is only my second piece of your novel, I read. I love your dialogues! This one stylistically reminds me Hemingway's style, when on surface everything is so almost light, but under is serious matter.
Ah, how generous, how kind, honored here.
The 'Remick' joke is so beautifully executed, as is "They heard the pins inside the lock tumble. A familiar sound, merely a click, but they thought, almost as if their minds were one, that they heard the separate mechanisms of the lock moving, tumbling like thunder."
Alisa, a perfect understanding of my intention as I probe Robert's discovery of what happened and of himself. You are such a marvelous reader and I thank you: heart to heart.
Beautiful writing, Mary. I loved this.
Thank you, Jeffrey. I really need readers for this one. Wondering if I screwed up??? Any thoughts?
Although I don't really do it much myself, I see that a quite a few of the writers I follow are using Notes more and more to promote their posts. And as a reader, when I do go onto Notes, I see posts that from writers I follow that I missed in my inbox. I think if people can read a chapter or a snippet of the glorious writing, they'll be willing to go back to the start and read what's been published. I've done that myself. Sorry not to have any original ideas - marketing isn't one of my strengths!
Marketing is not one of my strengths either. Is posting a note about one oneself okay? I worry that that offends. You are so kind to try to help. Thank you.
It seems to be normal to post notes about one's work, as long as that's not the only thing you post about. At least, that's how it appears to me. Certainly, on the few occasions I've become more active on Notes, I see a bit more traffic on my posts. But I don't have any data on this.
Okay will try with this chapter. Thank you, Jeffrey.
Mary, this was such a beautiful snippet, even with missing out on your earlier posts. Now I’m inspired to catch up on them! Your writing is beautiful!
Imola, that means so much. I look forward to being in touch.
“The absence of trust was a fact of their connection.” This whole chapter reads like a fault line tremor, everything on the brink of seismic disaster, the original cracks having more power than either ever dared to notice. And that last image of Eve turning the keys, the locking mechanism like the sky breaking open. So so so marvelous!
YOU are so, so marvelous. My heartfelt thanks for this amazing and insightful comment. Could you be a better reader? No way!
Remick and Saint looked very similar in their heydays; that may be why they confused them.
Maybe! ♥️
What a lovely comment that captures my intentions exactly. Thank you, Hamza!