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What hits me here -- and I haven't seen in comments -- is how you build suspense, like Hitchcock, but different. You do the set-up, then retreat into the minds of the protagonists, letting the suspense build and providing layers and context, even sometimes much removed from the present action. Not sure how you accomplish this so seamlessly, but it really works. Now must move on to the next...

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Wow, great insight. That was my intention, but have to admit that I did it without fully knowing that I was doing so. Hitchcock understood how to do that better than I thought instinctively perhaps I knew more than I thought? Dunno ... The mystery of creation ...

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Wow! Another fantastic chapter. I’m saving this in my examples of great writing about sex. It can be a hard thing to do, and you managed steamy and real and absorbing, all while driving both plot and character. Can’t wait for the next installation.

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Oh, man, thank you so, dear Holly. A favorite of my Substackers! xo ~ Mary

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Oh my this is steamy! I had a bit of a drive today and almost pulled over to absorb the details so as not to get into an accident. I'll be buying the Kindle version for my trip next week, I'm hooked! It'll be good company alongside The Woman Who Never Cooked.

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Oh, wow, talk about makin' my day! Check out the Table of contents now for prose sections of earlier audio chapters: https://marytabor.substack.com/p/who-by-fire-a-serial-novel-add

You asked for it and now you've got with lots of visuals to add to the story.

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Ooops, you're right! I've missed some! Goodness, I'm a mess. I'll be happy to start back from the beginning when on holiday, though I wish Kindle allowed me to "like" and comment after I read!

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You can post a review if you're so inclined!

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I would love to! I will make a note to do so after I’ve finished. ❤️❤️❤️

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I think I'm caught up but I'll go check the out to make sure?!

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Hi, Mary. After listening to the serial, I'm hooked on the story, so I bought a copy of the book. I look forward to reading it!

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Wow! Hope you didn't buy it used. :)

You know why, of course. :)

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I bought the Kindle version.

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Beautiful reading Mary! I really enjoyed this, even without hearing chapter 1-4 :)

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Missed this comment, Imola. I'm so glad and grateful!

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I haven’t listened to it yet, but look forward to it! I personally love to read so appreciate seeing words on the page. Having both is a real luxury!

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Thank you, Imola. Working on doing this with prose sections first and then the full audio. Your comment helps so much! You're a dear person.

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Oh, I’m so touched Mary! You are very dear too! Will listen to this on my evening walk!! Thank you!

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Beautifully read and intriguing interaction between characters.

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Thank you, Isabelle. The chapters are long and I am working hard to get the prose sections up in parts. Your loyalty warms my heart.

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